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I Wasn't Expecting This. by ~Eleh:iconEleh:



A long pull that made the tobacco crackle and
      you said, "I just need time."

There's a place on my left thigh that used to burn
      like a brand because your hand was there so
      long like you were afraid I'd disappear or leave if.
              You let go.

Another drag, short and nervous you wouldn't look at me,
      and you flicked it out the window.

You couldn't look at me, and I remember watching as the
      ember faded with distance in the right hand mirror, and
      I remember hoping we weren't that Newport.

And I remember my thigh was cold.
©2009 ~Eleh
:iconeleh:

Author's Comments

I wasn't expecting this, but David, you always did say life is unpredictable.

She doesn't love you like I do.



100 Themes.
44. Two Roads.


He must choose between a three year memory or a future.

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:iconnailsforbreakfast:
This is what's amazing about good poetry; you can say so much with so little.

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Still, they keep launching blundering campaigns,
Trying their wings once more in hopeless flight:
Blind moths against the wires of window screens.
Anything. Anything for a fix of light.
-"Street Moths", XJ Kennedy
:iconeleh:
I only wrote it a few days ago while my boyfriend was driving me home, so it's very raw. I actually wasn't sure if I had much confidence in it, but your comment swayed me. So..thank you.

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:iconnailsforbreakfast:
You're very welcome.
I guess you could polish it up a little, but I think a poem about raw emotion might do well to stay raw.

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Still, they keep launching blundering campaigns,
Trying their wings once more in hopeless flight:
Blind moths against the wires of window screens.
Anything. Anything for a fix of light.
-"Street Moths", XJ Kennedy
:iconeleh:
Yeah, hah. I still go back and edit the on-paper version. Sometimes people need to just step back, otherwise nothing in this life would ever be finished.

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:icondoom-kittie:
i really like this.
i don't really know what else to say, just that its.. great. love it.

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meow.
:iconeleh:
Thank you :)

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